使用简洁的词来代替冗长累赘的短语
例(10):Wordy: In the sense of his speech he talked on the question of securities.
Concise: During his speech he talked about securities.
例(11)Wordy: During the proceeding year, the company was able to accelerate productive operations.
Concise: Last year, the company was able to accelerate productive operations.
例(10)和例(11)中wordy的句子里In the sense of 可以用During来代替,同为"在...里"的意思;on the question of 可以用about来替代,同为"有关...,关于..."同理,例(11)中wordy的句子里的During the proceeding year也可以用Last year来代替。没有改变原来句子要表达的意思,而且显得更加简洁,更加直白,在口语中更加常用。会使得读信人更加容易理解。既然如此,商务信函写作者为什么不用这些简洁、明了、清晰的常用词来代替那些冗长、累赘、空洞的短语呢?